Writing Great Emails

Subject Ask Send
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Why it matters

Email is how adults get things done. Extensions, meetings with the principal, recommendation letters, summer jobs: they usually start with an email. A clear one gets a fast yes. A messy one sits unread.

The basics

  • Write a subject line that says what and why. "Question about Friday's lab report," not "hi" or "URGENT!!!" Keep it under about 60 characters so it doesn't get cut off.

  • Get the greeting right. Anyone who works for the school or district (teachers, counselors, principals, board members) gets a title and last name. People outside the school system, like a reporter, an alum, or a local business owner, get their first name.

    School or districtHi Ms. Rivera, School or districtHi Dr. Lee, Outside the school systemHi Dana,
  • Match the formality. Full sentences, no slang, no emoji, and never "hey" to an administrator. Sign off with "Thank you," or "Best," plus your full name.

  • Get to the point. Your first sentence says why you're writing. Then go line by line and ask: does cutting this remove meaning? If not, cut it.

First line, edited31 words31 → 10 words

I'm writing to you today because I was hoping that maybe you might be able to help me with Could you help me with the lab report that we have due on Friday, if that's okaydue Friday?

  • Use short paragraphs, one idea each. Nobody reads a wall of text on a phone.

  • Make one clear ask, and make it easy to answer. Yes-or-no questions and specific times ("I'm free Tuesday or Thursday after school") get faster replies.

  • Follow up politely. Wait two or three school days (a week for busy admins), then reply in the same thread: "Just bumping this in case it got buried!"

  • Proofread once. Read it aloud, check their name, check the attachment. Send.

  • CC with purpose. CC a parent if it's about discipline or safety, or if a grade dispute is going nowhere. Don't CC someone's boss to pressure them. Go to the person first.

Don't reread it a dozen times. Send.

A sample email to a teacher

FromJordan Kim
ToMr. Patel, history teacher
SubjectExtension request for Thursday's history essay46

46 characters. Fits on a phone, and says what and why.

Hi Mr. Patel,

I have a debate tournament Wednesday night that will run late, so I'm worried about finishing the history essay due Thursday.

Could I turn it in Friday morning instead?

My outline is done, and I can send it to you Thursday so you can see where I'm at.

Thank you,
Jordan Kim, 3rd period

  1. Why you're writing, in the first sentence
  2. One clear, specific ask
  3. Proof you're taking it seriously

More on asking for extensions.

Ready to email people who don't know you yet, like a school board member, a reporter, or an alum? Next step: cold email.